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Evil Q
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« on: March 14, 2008, 01:44:36 PM »

The first EU daedalus type battlecruiser “The Nietzsche” had just launched from it subterranean base in Kleine Brogel, Belgium and was preparing for a sub light engines test run to the edge of the solar system. It’s name chosen because of the famous German philosopher Friedrich Nietzsche who had declared that man had killed God. The name was deemed fitting for a ship that given the SGC’s luck would probably sooner or later fight the next race of beings that declared themselves god.
 
Like the Ares before it, she was build after the demise of the Asgard and therefore had their technology fully integrated during construction. With Ori threat gone the asgard core was no longer problematic and it’s functionalities could be fully exploited.
 
Earth based weapons had been restricted to a minimum choosing the fully take advantage of energy based weapons. The only earth based weapons where the Mark XVII nuclear missiles and a few FN rail guns that served as a ‘screen’ to protect the X304 bays from incoming debris and missiles. Landing bays had often proved to be vulnerable targets in contacts with the wraith and their suicide run. Energy weapons just didn’t have the raw power and spread of a rail guns, they lacked the kinetic impact.
 
 
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On board the Nietzsche captain Dumont was going over all the new features installed. They would be testing many of them during this first sub light test run while also protecting the system while the other cruisers where in Pegasus attacking Michaels bases. His favorite new systems where the cloaking system and the time shielding software. After the latest incident with Baal all ships came installed with them.
 
Dumont was rather young to be captain, he was only 32 and had made a fast rise trough the ranks. Unlike most of the military he had grown up with too much love for science fiction and it had earned the nickname “Morden”, a tribute also to his rather dark sense of humour.
 
After being satisfied that the panels wouldn’t explode upon departure (he had frequently asked his staff to make sure the ship was fully equipped with circuit breakers, earning him the wrath of many techies) he gave the order to get underway.
 
Nothing happened.
 
Captain Dumont was just about to ask his first in command Nell O'Farrell what the problem was when he noticed half the bridge was grinning. A second later it sank it what they where waiting for, and now grinning himself he stood up making the famous hand gesture he uttered the words “make it so number one”
 
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Just before a fierce battle took place above P4X-639 . A free jaffa cargo ship and it’s h’tak escort where ambushed by raiders and they where loosing bad. In a desperate attempt to escape the cargo ship entered the planets atmosphere and was heading for the stargate. Just as they where about to ring down however the ship got hit and lost engine control,  crashing into a weird looking stone altar.
 
The same alter had caused a temporal loop that caught 14 Stargates and planets 7 years prior when SG1 encountered an alien scientist tampering with an unsuccessful ancient experiment. After the incident in question the power source of the device had been removed the avoid this from happening againt.
 
Upon impact the cargo ship, loaded with naquada exploded, and the energy transfer activate the device and as it was destroyed it repeated it’s last executed program stored in the buffer, the gate activate and a surge of energy entered the gate.
 
 
 
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Make it so …
 
The ship surged forward and raced towards the asteroid belt at the edge of earth solar system engaging various systems underway and finally when they reached the field the cloak was engaged.
 
Suddenly alarms rang, the ship shook violently but no panels exploded. Then the bridge went dark, a few moments later backup power kicked in. Slowly all the system came back online
 
The asgard core was spitting out strange data too. It showed that the ship had been caught at the edge of a subspace temporal inversion field that had emanated from earth and had enveloped the solar entire system. The Nietzsche had been cloaked at the outer edge and without it temporal shields up was pushed into a deep layer of subspace before exiting on what seemed to be the other side.
 
Finally the viewer came back online. Before them hang 2 goa’uld mother ship that seemed to be parked in Jupiter’s orbit. They where unaware of the presence of the cloacked Nietzsche.
 
Dumont ordered to scan both vessels, only the results that came back where very disturbing. The scanned ships where the vessels that had tried to attack earth years before in commanded by apophis himself.
 
The asgard core chose the same time to inform him of the fact that they apparently where no longer in their own dimension. It subsequently proposed to recreate the events that had brought them there in order to return to there own dimension.
 
“Decloack and open fire”
 
The Nietzsche decloaked and opened fire on both vessels, a few seconds later the battle was over and the Nietzsche had killed its first gods. A stunned SG1 was in its hold as the Nietzsche parked itself cloaked in earth orbit and beamed them down to the gate room.
 
Not braking cloak the Nietzsche left orbit and engaged it’s hyper drive.
 
Six months later the Nietzsche entered the earth solar system again. Using old access codes it connected to the SGC mainframe and downloaded all information and ship schematics to it.
 
Then the asgard core engaged it’s corrective pulse and the Nietzsche left for what they believed was home, leaving behind them a dimension that was 100 % goa’uld and Ori proof and with a "succesfull weapons test" report
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« Reply #1 on: March 14, 2008, 07:03:48 PM »

Nice start.  A few small spelling & grammatical errors, but on the whole it is well written.  I really like the premise of it.  I just want to know what happened to the people who were beamed to the gate room.

Liked the name of your captain btw.  Cheesy
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« Reply #2 on: March 15, 2008, 01:32:26 PM »

cpt dumont rolling
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« Reply #3 on: March 15, 2008, 04:52:17 PM »

Cheesy  yup it suits doesn't it?  Mind you, I was thinking that would be the name of the supreme commander of the universe's fleet, not just the captain!! rolling
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« Reply #4 on: March 15, 2008, 07:33:02 PM »

i was expecting some guy"primon" scrubbing his ships weapons rolling
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« Reply #5 on: March 15, 2008, 08:26:18 PM »

Rofl  That's who is currently in the brig for drunk & disorderly....mostly for shouting the Croatian National Anthem at the top of his lungs whilst trying to break into what he thought was Val's quarters...I mean Vala's quarters, but was actually Landry's quarters!!  Wink
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« Reply #6 on: March 15, 2008, 10:38:41 PM »

in the second chapter there is an ivon croas that dies Cheesy
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« Reply #7 on: March 15, 2008, 10:55:40 PM »

rolling  Let me guess: it's something grisly, painful & long.
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« Reply #8 on: March 15, 2008, 11:16:53 PM »

beaten to death by his brother that became a goa'uld host
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« Reply #9 on: March 16, 2008, 01:30:48 AM »

LOL  That works!!  Cheesy  But I'd be willing to bet someone else would prefer that is was death during some bizarre sexual act with the the goauld's queen!!  rolling
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« Reply #10 on: March 16, 2008, 11:05:27 AM »

a few chapters later it turns out he wasn't a host at all, he just had a voice alternator and did it for fun


btw if anyone really expects new chapters good luck LOL this was not meant as serious, just to see how much time would go in typing 2 pages Cheesy
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« Reply #11 on: March 16, 2008, 12:00:02 PM »

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beaten to death by his brother that became a goa'uld host
i lol'd then i lol'd again rolling

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LOL  That works!!  Cheesy  But I'd be willing to bet someone else would prefer that is was death during some bizarre sexual act with the the goauld's queen!!  rolling
yes plz:) lol:rofl:
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a few chapters later it turns out he wasn't a host at all, he just had a voice alternator and did it for fun


btw if anyone really expects new chapters good luck LOL this was not meant as serious, just to see how much time would go in typing 2 pages Cheesy
2 late, we demand more..or thau shall be renamed Sluttydick 2 rolling
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« Reply #12 on: March 16, 2008, 04:49:54 PM »

Hmmmm....come up with something more original.  Or change Sluttydick to hairybutt & give Q the dick.....man that DID NOT come out right!!!!  rolling
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« Reply #13 on: March 16, 2008, 05:00:03 PM »

Quote from: Valkyrie;68159
Hmmmm....come up with something more original.  Or change Sluttydick to hairybutt & give Q the dick.....man that DID NOT come out right!!!!  rolling


no,no..i think ur on to something there rolling
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« Reply #14 on: March 16, 2008, 06:01:36 PM »

LOL  Okay I am in big trouble now!!!

Q, sweetie, I know better.  Wink  Especially after what you gave me the other day....mmmmm.....

And NO I'm not gonna share with the rest of you.  Tongue
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